The Head's Office has set a new challenge for this week with the prompt: …the sun shone but…. So here goes! Please view the other entries at the above link as well.
The sun shone but the strong breeze coming off the sea was chilly and she wrapped her cardigan tighter around her. The wind tossed her hair and blew it against her mouth, sticking to her lip gloss, but she didn't notice. A dog ran up to her, panting, pressing its cold nose against her hand but ran off as it's owner whistled. He gave her a puzzled glance as he passed her, wondering why this woman stood there at the same time every day, staring out to sea. A lone tear ran down her face as she turned and walked back to her car.
Some great detail in this - I especially like the bit about her hair sticking to her lip gloss.
ReplyDeleteThat's so sad. I wonder what she was thinking and why she was there every day. I love the detail especially about the dog's nose
ReplyDeleteI could feel the breeze and the chill in the air! Why was she crying?! I'm very curious. Very well written and I enjoyed reading that. I've posted mine now too, thanks for telling me about this, love it!
ReplyDeleteThe longing stare. The tear on the cheek. The sense of someone lost at sea is told in your story I think. It could be the story of many past who have lost loved ones in stormy seas.
ReplyDeleteWhat a coincidence. Just wrote mine without looking at others and then came back to the site to read the rest. Ours are very similar! I love the mystery! We all want to know why people are sad, don't we?
ReplyDeleteA love the gentle way that you share her emotions with a simple tear and atmosphere. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteVery atmospheric. Still trying to think what mine will be about...
ReplyDeleteThis reminds me of a "french lieutenant's woman". Beautiful imagery.
ReplyDeleteOh bless that pooch! How sad. This is such good writing. I love the details about the weather. Really sets the scene. Thank you so much for writing for the 100WCGU!
ReplyDeleteI agree with the others. This scene is so vivid that I feel as if I'm there in the distance wondering what she's thinking.
ReplyDeleteSo sad, yet beautiful.
ReplyDeleteaaah, this is so well written. I want to find out why she is crying? Reminds me of the many times I have stared out at the ocean and got lost in my thoughts.....
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